Studying with Music The transition from high school to college gives students much more freedom. The change from being in class less but needing to study more can be difficult to grasp. Because there are no teachers or parents monitoring study the style of studying in college is based on the student. This poses the question, do college students listen to music while they study? Many studies have gone into the effects of listening to music while multitasking but the survey results of how many college students listen to music while studding is fascinating. There have been a lot of studies on what listening to music does to people while trying to focus and get work done. A study that was conducted in 1995 found “ a significant, positive effect on performance, organization satisfaction and mood states when personal headsets playing music were used in an office situation” (Adrian Furnham, Anna Bradley). While ...
Areas to work on
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2.Look through your paper. there are times you put your own opinion and put adjectives in with it. This make the paper look less of a research paper.
Formatting and language
A) the language is formal and concise. The only time where it is not formal and when you put your own opinion about it being "fascinating"
B) the errors I noticed a lot were your comma placements. you missed a lot of commas.
C) Your in text citations and formatting looked very good.
Organization
A) make sure to identify your gap in the intro.
B) if you want, you can no a little deeper in your sections that talk about the people and the procedure.
C)Also in your results make it longer than 2 sentences. Talk about your findings before or after the graphs.
Overall you have a very strong paper. Look at the grammar errors and you will be fine. Look at the spacing between one of your paragraphs. I highlighted it in your paper, so look
Also state why it is important the questions you asked.
GOOD JOB!!!!
Your paper was so good!! I couldn't find a lot that you needed to work on. I would say that you need to reread your paper over again just to focus on grammar. I was connected to the reading the entire time so that was good. Your overall oragnization of the whole thing was perfect. I liked how you had a ton of evidence too so that the reader could follow. I dont have anything for you that you need to fix because i think it was overall a really strong paper. You did an amazing job
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