Sample Essay Positives and Negatives

Writing in Political Science 
Positives

• Directly quoted the use of language in political science
• All sources are up to date with the oldest one from 2004
• Looked at both structure as well as language 

Negatives

• Repeats the same idea but with different wording
• Not as concise as it could be
• The conclusion has statistics in it

Writing in Psychology  
Positives

• Great intro describing the different fields of psychology  
• Analyzed a good variety of types of psychology 
• used a lot of sources 

Negatives

• Very long quotes
• Over used quotes in the interview
• Very short conclusion 

Writing as a Creative Writer
Positives

• Great word choice
• Amazing intro
• Great layout of the essay 

Negatives

• Could be a little more concise 
• Could have less quotes and more analysis 
• Had quotes in the final paragraph 

Writing in Economics 
Positives

• Great introduction paragraph
• Concise conclusion 
• lots of analysis

Negatives

• Not a lot of evidence 
• Very long body paragraphs 
• Need direct quotes to show language 

Writing in Engineering 
Positives

• Great use of heading 
• Great analysis of the quotes
• Looks at all aspects of writing including formatting 

Negatives

• Started the essay with a quote 
• Could analyze the scientific language used more
• Could expand on the quote analysis

Writing in Business
Positives

• Shows real language used 
• Analyzes all aspects of the essay 
• Great analysis of quotes 

Negatives

• Started essay with a quote
• lack of quotes in some paragraphs 
• Could be a little more concise